Talk:Chapter 2 (Proud Line)/@comment-21119641-20180314032142

"Come on! There's nothing wrong with not knowing it, right?! I just transform into a cat-ish tiger-thing! It’s not like there’s a book or something to tell me-!" Quote of the chapter, my boooooooooooy! This was some quick but very fun ride! We've got to see some cool action, and I love how you made Seagar menacing threatening even without the use of a Devil Fruit, he really felt like a character. The fight with Luk was pretty cool, feels really OP'ish, and its progress made sense- I DIG THAT FINISHER THOUGH, A FUCKIN' FLYING KICK TO THA' FACE- also dig those attack names.

DAMNITT, I WAS BEGINNING TO SHIP LUK X LENA DUE TO JENKS' COMMENT BUT THEN SHE SANK IT.

Also, Jenks is sucha' badass! Old man kicks ass, says nice things, does his own shit and with his grand-d tagging along even. Love how he was both discouraging and encouraging with Luk, it's represented quite nicely.

All in all, this was pretty nice, been a while since chapter 1, but things are fresh! Looking forward to how this figure (whom I assume is the girl from before) interacts with Luk, since I think he didn't see her.

I've noticed a trend btw, you tend to substitute some characters' names with aliases and all that (haired youth and all). I don't recommend doing that, unless it's an extreme case, it feels really eh, whereas you can just use "he" or their name itself.

But, this doesn't detrack at all, so, a solid 9/10 to this! Your writing is great and nicer than ever, great fight, humour and characterization!