Talk:Chapter 1 (Proud Line)/@comment-21119641-20171125185914

Honestly, pleasantly surprised with this chapter, which is a pretty good for an introductory chapter! So, it more than fits the standard I'd wait for a first chapter. I love how you characterized every single character, one giving room for another in a natural way. I like Luk's objective, refreshing from just becoming Pirate King, and I'm intrigued to see WHY he wants to reach (and who the fuck Floury really is)

In particular, I loved the scene in which he sunk (how you described it was soooooo gooooooooood) and Luk's interaction with the li'l boy (which is also refreshing).

The way you layered out the description for the locations was also pretty good, inspirational!

I think that's it, gladly waiting for the next chapter! 9.5/10!