Talk:Negotiations Gone Sour! The Rebellion Pops!/@comment-24507267-20160610212518

Again a pretty good chapter, but there's something that annoyed me. The dialogue, there's nothing wrong with it I just can't tell who's talking when. Just start a new paragraph when someone new is talking please, it makes things easier to read. Other than that, I think things are about to get real.

Poor poor Ulysses. Doesn't he know a captain must go down with his ship? The ship is gone, and that leaves just you.